Due to family situations I was not able to go into further detail with editing my rough draft. I plan to have an updated draft shortly.
Short Analysis Assignment
All writers write in a way that simply works for them. Writing has been
opinioned to be an art of it’s own and how one decides to express themselves
may vary based on how others perceive their writing and capabilities. Being a
student for the past sixteen years I have noticed many different strategies for
writing based on how my teacher’s taught writing. Unlike some, I find it useful
if a professor comments on my writing whether it is something I take to heart
or something I ignore. I want look into how the complexity of professors’
comments can encourage or discourage a writer. The details within professors’
comments may benefit some writers, but discourage others based on their writing
abilities and interests.
Through many observations and days of analyzing professors’ comments
within papers there were many similarities as well as differences. Many of the
comments among the six papers were positive comments. For example, comment
number six in Sample 4 mentions, “There
are definitely important reasons to cite (and to not plagiarize). My gut says
you might need to go deeper into some of them, particularly those the audience
may find surprising.” This is a very detailed comment and the professor offers
additional research that the writer can do to strengthen their paper. It seems
as if the professor has high expectations and that is why they give the writer
more ideas for their paper. On the other hand, in Sample 5 the professor does
not seem to give the writer a lot of feedback which may lead the student not to
revise their work to their full potential. One negative comment in particular
is as follows, “Too much repetition here, cut to your point.” This comment may
discourage the writer because they may interpret that their professor did not
put much time into reading their paper. The professor is clearly not giving the
writer the feedback that they need to better enhance their paper. The writer
may believe that their writing is at the professor’s expectations since there
is no additional information regarding how to get to their focus or what to cut
in their paragraph. Interpretation means a lot through the description of a professor
comments and perhaps the personality of the professor as well.
I do find it beneficial when a professor gives me feedback that can lead
me towards a better paper. In Sample 3, the professor gives the writer a link
that they can use to support their ideas between images and text of fashions.
The writer can look at the link provided to go into more details regarding
fashion. This comment is very well thought out by the professor, which the
student can find valuable in their revision. On the other hand, in Sample 5 the
professor circles “fighting” and comments, “or love making”. Although, this
comment is not as useful as the previous professor’s comment, this professor goes
into providing the writer with a comment they can use to their advantage. The
advice given by the professor in Sample 5 is not as descriptive as Sample 3,
but it does offer the writer feedback in terms of correcting smaller issues in
their paper.
To look into a deeper issue of how the
comments are viewed as a whole I will describe the length of the comments in
Sample 1 and Sample 6. Most if not all of the comments in Sample 1 are longer
than a sentence and seem to ask a question for the writer. For example, Sample
1 mentions, “The basic ideas of this paragraph are clear, but I feel they could
be taken further. Why should students care about opposing viewpoints? How
should they deal with them if they must be incorporated into the argument? The
bullets in this sections are good advice for research in general, but it
doesn’t really tell students how to deal with sources that challenge their
viewpoint and that they can’t ignore.” This comment is four sentences long and
allows the student to think critically in terms of what they are speaking about
in their paper. On the contrary, Sample 5 has comments that are roughly about
three words each. The length among these comments does not describe what the
reader can work on to support that particular point in their paper. For
example, “not soul but taste.” The professor could have suggested different
words or phrases the writer could have used to get their point across which is
what the professor did in the other Samples I have previously mentioned. Length
means a lot in terms of the thought that the professor gives to the writer. The
more questions that the professor asks the writer the more the writer can add
to their paper to make it stand out.
In conclusion, the more detailed a professor’s comment is the more
advantages that the students can receive from the comments. Comments that are
only a few words long do not offer the writer much in terms of suggestions. Overall,
the professors comments in all of the Samples except Sample 5, write to the
students on a personal note. The personal paragraph contains information based
on what went well in the writer’s paper and what the writer may want to focus
on to meet the expectations of the assignment. Sample 5 does not give the
writer any personal comments that’s gives the writer confidence and assurance. **don’t
know how to end**
**may change research question? Can
mine be answered?**
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