Blog 10

Blog #10: Post your group's analysis of the 6 papers with comments.  

Group:

Shana

Andrea

Kelsee

Generra

Question:

What features of the comments give information for the the revision of the paper?

Coding of comments:

#1- Writing Guide with Comments:
1. There are no negative comments.
2. Almost every comment contains positive feedback.
3. Encourages the student to edit their paper, without being aggressive.
4. Gives examples of sources that can be used to further extend the writer's work.
5. Sums up all the comments of the paper by providing the writer with a paragraph containing strong points and areas that need work.

#2- Process Narrative with Comments:

1. There are no negative comments.

2. Almost every comment contains positive feedback.  

3. Encourages the student to edit their paper, without being aggressive.

4.  Gives examples of sources that can be used to further extend the writer's work.

5. Sums up all the comments of the paper by providing the writer with a paragraph  

    containing strong points and areas that need work.

      

*I feel that these two papers are very similar in terms of comments. My group and I felt like these papers were commented by the same professor. We did not notice any negative feedback, instead we noticed many ways that the professor commented on the writer's work by asking numerous questions and providing feedback that benefited the writer.

#3- Sample 3

1. Gives a lot of positive comments, while staying away from aggressive comments.
2. Gives a check list of items that the writer can work on based on the overall paper.
3. Comment #3 provides a website that the writer can use to add more information.
4. Provides questions to keep the writer on track.

*There are no negative comments, the paper is full of positive feedback as well. By asking the writer so many questions the writer can extend their paper by answering those questions. All three papers are similar comment wise, thus far. 

#4- Sample 4

1.  The first comment is a bit awkward, it seems more of a negative comment than   

     positive. 

2.  Comment #4 gives the writer guidance on how to edit this particular section.

3.  There is no negativity because the professor goes into further explanation on how the   

      writer can fix or add to their writing. (Comment #3, Comment #14)

4.  Gives the writer questions to answer so that their writing is more clearly and covers all 

      aspects.

#5- Sample 5

1.     The first comment is one of the only positive comments I saw. It tells the writer what 

        to define so that their paper is stronger.

2.     There are too many grammar comments, which is irritating to me. 

3.     For the fact that the comments are handwritten and not typed, they are hard to   

         understand at times. 

4.     There are too many cross-outs or circling that bring negativity to the writer's work.

5.      At the end of the paper the comment mentions the writing is weak, but this comment   

         does not give the student any advice on how to fix their work.

*Overall, this paper is the first paper that contains negative feedback, where the comments gear the student towards failure rather than success in their revision. Maybe this is due to the fact the comments were handwritten or the professor looks for more negative comments than for positive comments. 

#6- Sample 6

1. The first page contains few comments, but overall they are positive. 

2. Words are added to make the sentence flow better. ("Solemn & "or a banquet")

3. The comment about organizing the examples, is feedback that the writer can use to   

edit their paper to make their information fit together.
4. On the second page, there are many comments that give the writer suggestions of what to write. ("a symbol of life")

5. Encourages the student by giving the student two sentences summarizing their paper.

*This paper is another paper that contains mostly positive comments rather than negative comments. The comments in this paper aren't as detailed but there are still comments that the writer can use to revise their paper. This paper fits into the category that all of the papers fit into, but sample 5. The handwritten comments in this paper are more clear than that of sample 5 as well.

Unanswered Questions:

• How does the writer feel when reading the comments to revise their paper?
• Are the comments positive or negative?
• Do the comments confuse or help the writer?
• What are the similarities between the comments? Are they written by the same professor?
• Are comments taken in different perspectives based on the relationship with the professor?
• Are comments taken in different perspectives based on how the writer feels about the topic?
• Are handwritten comments less descriptive than that of typed comments?